if its good enough for you to want to keep on reading…i have the rest, and ill post if you’d like just let me know…thanks…and this is the first time ive ever written anything creative so dont be too harsh…lol
The fountain of youth is such a thing that causes joviality in any man, let alone a pirate. Captain Butch, the epitome of a man obsessed with finding such a treasure, was bemused, wondering how he could find the Flue of Death, the passageway that led to the Island of Life, on which the fountain of youth was located. As Captain Butch was lost in thought, an old man boarded his ship, and was immediately surrounded by the crew, without having to be conjured by their captain. Captain Butch drew his sword, as he stared at the man. The man, seemingly finding something humorous about the situation, said “Foolish men, I come to aid you in your quest, and you threaten me?” “What quest do you speak of old man?”, said Captain Butcher, confused.
i cant add the entire paragraph cause its too long…
The man said, “What else? The sole object of your desire, the Fountain of Youth!” Captain Butch had little faith in the man, and said “Ha! Why would you tell me the whereabouts of such a precious item and not retrieve it yourself? All men know that only a single person can drink from the fountain of youth, and obtain its benefits! Why would you give up such a valuable secret?” The man, finally introducing himself as Canker, went on to tell Captain Butch of the whereabouts of the Flue of Death. Whoever was able to pass the Flue of Death, would reach the Island of Life. The Fountain of Youth was hidden amongst the many glades of the beautiful island. Searching through the many open spaces of forest would be a hard task to complete, but Canker had heard of a clue as to which glade held the Fountain of Youth. The clue was , “Follow the trail left by nature, and you will find what you seek”. Captain Butch became engrossed with his thoughts of this revelation, and how he was now closer than
than ever to reaching his dream, his obsession. Canker interrupted this jaunt when he said, “And to answer your previous question, I must pass this knowledge onto another unlike myself because I have neither the skillful crew nor the navigational skill that you possess. But I do have one request in return for my favor; that you bring me along so that I can experience the beauty of the Island of Life, that is, if you’re able to succeed.
sorry for the mess…the paragrapgh starts with the main question and continues with the additional details…please tell me if you’d like to read the next paragrapgh
thanks dave…i wasnt sure whether to call him butch or butcher…but since canker had an -er at the end of his name i decided to call the captain just butch…i guess i forgot to change that one from butcher to butch!
thanks persiphone_hellecat and pokadots…to hellacat, part of the assignment was to use words that we dont normally use, in hopes that it would better our vocab for the SAT’s…and i think that those words actually fit better with the story that using something such as “happy” or “confused”..but thank you guys for your opinions!
thanks vishor! thanks an exccellent tip…i hadnt even thought of that…ill be sure to do so in any upcoming assignments!
PARAGRAPH # 2
Captain Butch had yet to see a flaw in what this wise man had said, so he agreed and began to ready supplies for himself and his crew. The journey to the Flue of death was a long and treacherous one, but what lay ahead was much worse. As the days went on, the Captain had wondered whether his decision to trust this man was the right one. Even the crew became aggravated, making plans to overthrow Canker, and even Captain Butcher if necessary! This all changed though, when through the heavy fog, all aboard this ship could see a slight crack in the wall of an enormous mountain. Canker pointed it out, and said “Look my fellow crew mates! I told you my story was of truth, not fib! Although we have reached the Flue of Death, it is now in your hands to voyage through it safely. I have done my part, now I hope you will succeed in doing yours.”
PARAGRAPGH # 2 (CONTINUED)
Captain Butch looked at his crew, he stared at them long and hard and asked with authority, “I will not force any of you to join me in this journey. There is no guarantee any of us will make it out of this alive, but I do promise you my life if I must to save yours.” Upon hearing this, even the most cowardly of the crew stood up straight, and in union said “AY CAPTAIN! YE LEAD, WE FOLLOW!” As the ship sailed into the narrow valley, it seemed as though it was sailing into pure blackness. The blackness of death.
potc…thanks for the feedback…the only similarities to pirates of the carribean was that the story involves pirates…and at the end of the third one jack is looking for the fountain of youth not barbosa…i believe…lol
